Author Topic: Forgotten Screamer (Read 12810 times)

Phoenix · « **on:** September 14, 2008, 05:32:06 PM »

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Ok, this is a new story for me. Still in the work-in-progress stages, so updates on this may be slower then some of my others.

However i still need feedback on it, it is going to be different then what i usually write, in later chapters you should see why.
I'll leave it to you know,

Read and reply your thoughts, i'll take all into good measure and try to improve on it.

hope it grips you

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She hides behind her long hair, hoping that the world will change the next time she looks and breathes the tainted air she grew up in. She hates it here, she always has, yet she can’t escape. She knows if she does they’ll find her and bring her back to reality. But is it reality? Where she can’t even open her eyes without crying out in pain because she’s so scared to ring and phone for help?.

She walks alone, no ones behind her except her broken conscience and confidence that fell to pieces over 15 years ago. How is she still alive? One person knows. But she doesn’t understand, that person is me.

I'm writing her story, one she can't tell because her memories are so hard to bring up. Maybe someday she'll realise this is the right thing to do.
Maybe this way she can move on and not live in the past.

These are the words she'll never say.

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Contents

Foreward - Singing in the rain
Chapter 1 - Front door moving and a blast from the past
Chapter 2 - Lost
Chapter 3 - Secret Santuary
Chapter 4 - Numb
Chapter 5 - Unchosen Words
Chapter 6 - On top of the world
Chapter 7 - Pathways
Chapter 8 - Freedom Held Bound *part 1*
Chapter 9 - Freedom Held Bound *part 2
Chapter 10 - Offensive/Defensive?

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Phoenix · « **Reply #271 on:** December 04, 2009, 07:07:45 PM »

Heres the thing, Forgotten Screamer's a trilogy, but i'm having ideas for Marcos and Charlie stories too. Anyone up for the idea of the trio's stories to be done from their own pov?

{Obviously in the same style..}

Saint · « **Reply #272 on:** December 04, 2009, 07:12:44 PM »

You mean like three trilogies, or each of the trilogy from a different pov?

Phoenix · « **Reply #273 on:** December 04, 2009, 07:32:18 PM »

That's the same thing right?

Ok, to re-word what i recently posted.

Kara - trilogy.
Marcos - Trilogy
Charlie - Trilogy.

Saint · « **Reply #274 on:** December 04, 2009, 09:18:20 PM »

Ah, I see. I like the idea.

(And I meant three stories, one from each pov, to make one trilogy.)

Phoenix · « **Reply #275 on:** December 04, 2009, 09:28:53 PM »

That idea,
One Kara
one Marcos
one Charlie
As a trilogy wouldn't work.

Kara's tale would be at least 70 chapters.

Saint · « **Reply #276 on:** December 04, 2009, 09:32:30 PM »

70?!? O_O We have a lot of awesomeness ahead then?

And I wasn't suggesting; just didn't know what you meant.

Phoenix · « **Reply #277 on:** December 07, 2009, 02:35:47 PM »

Well now you do, i started writing this a few nights ago but college whacked a load of work on my head it gave me a massive headache and even then i couldn't get it completed.

Anyway

I'm still working on it now actually, deadline was today but in my group practically no one managed to finish the 'starpack' project.

Basically, i'll be writing this later. To keep me sane. Tomorrow i'll be writing mostly, then martial arts. Wednesday? well, i don't want to think that far ahead to be honest. I just need to get through this week. *groans inwardly*

Chinaren · « **Reply #278 on:** December 08, 2009, 12:38:28 AM »

Quote

I just need to get through this week.

I feel your pain Pho!

Phoenix · « **Reply #279 on:** December 09, 2009, 12:43:35 PM »

Quote from: China link=topic=191.msg18721#msg18721 date=1260232708

I feel your pain Pho!

*sigh*

All i can say is i wasn't expecting what happened this morning. It just topped off the week and it's not even over yet. Perfect

.

Phoenix · « **Reply #280 on:** December 11, 2009, 11:25:54 PM »

Kara immediately gave up the struggle to be freed, she knew it was hopeless anyway. Elaine, and her clones were slowly getting closer but although she wanted to escape she wanted to prove that she wasn't even more of a freak show. After all, didn't everyone out of this 'group' know she had that cut on her nose?
Students who were walking past stopped to stare at the scene but knew better then to stick around. It was only when Elaine finally reached them that they realised what was going on and practically diverted going home out of that gate.
“Think you could escape?” Elaine snarled. She smirked at Charlie and Marcos then nodded to Will, Kara thought he'd loosen his grip but he instead tightened it. Almost admitting defeat, Kara hung her head with a quiet sigh and waited. The worst thing was she didn't know what to expect.
“If you're going to hit her, hit me instead.” Marcos snarled, Kara bit her lip quietly and said nothing. There was nothing she could say to change his mind. She knew what was going to happen next, but she just wasn't sure on what order.
“You honestly think I can deny you that small bit of fun from your life? Seeing Kara get hit over and over without you being able to help?” Elaine laughed,
“She's weak, if you do anything to her she'll just collapse! Just leave her alone!” Charlie cried desperately,
“You really think we care what happens to her?” Will laughed,
“Maybe you should!” Marcos growled,
“Why? She's not exactly the bravest person here, and she's definitely not the most important.” Elaine retorted,
“You don't know her,” Charlie whispered,
“What was that 'Princess'?” Will said smugly, tightening his grip on Kara once more straight after. Everyone heard her lightly squeal with pain but no one tried to help her.
“Just leave her alone, leave them both alone. If you're going to hit them, hit me instead. I can take it more then them!” Marcos cried out desperately,
“However much we love your voice Marcos, it's time for you to shut up.” Elaine snapped, “With your current attitude there is no doubt in my mind that we'll be making all three of you pay, the question now is, what order?”
“I asked you a question 'Princess', what did you say?” Will ordered to Charlie,
“I didn't say anything,” She lied,
“Don't lie to me, it really isn't a smart idea.”
“I'm not lying! I swear I'm not, I-” Charlie stopped. She could see the anger in Will's eyes and shivered, Marcos then turned to Will. Having the impact and amount of eyes he wanted watching, he proudly let go of Kara and pushed her so roughly onto the floor her trousers ripped as she landed.
Marcos roared in anger, at the same time Will pushed his way through to Charlie and with the same amount of force managed to repeat his actions. Charlie screamed as she fell, rolling a few times before coming to a halt by a brick wall.
“You really shouldn't have done that,” Marcos warned, “You really really shouldn't have.”
“Too late,” Will smirked. “It seems Kara's already given up the fight,” he continued as he looked to Kara's practically limp body. She hadn't moved from where she'd landed, and it was this that was starting to get Marcos and Charlie worried. “Have you?” He turned to Charlie.
“Leave her alone.” Marcos ordered,
“I haven't even started yet,” Elaine coldly smiled, “It's time you all learnt some respect.”

Off-Topic:

[.Chapter title May/May-not change.]

Saint · « **Reply #281 on:** December 11, 2009, 11:31:58 PM »

Ooooh, suspenseful.

Phoenix · « **Reply #282 on:** December 11, 2009, 11:33:07 PM »

You likes?

NicTei · « **Reply #283 on:** December 11, 2009, 11:37:17 PM »

*yells* MITO!! Get'cher butt in there!

Phoenix · « **Reply #284 on:** December 11, 2009, 11:46:44 PM »

*Mito slowly backs away from laptop scream

*

I think you scared him off

.

Angel · « **Reply #285 on:** December 12, 2009, 02:24:17 PM »

Write! Please!!!

Saint · « **Reply #286 on:** December 12, 2009, 06:42:12 PM »

Quote from: NicTei link=topic=191.msg18862#msg18862 date=1260574637

*yells* MITO!! Get'cher butt in there!

*flies in*

*hits a telephone box*

*out cold* x_x

Phoenix · « **Reply #287 on:** December 12, 2009, 06:51:07 PM »

Do you mind not using my characters without my permission in future?

I already acted out for Mito.

Saint · « **Reply #288 on:** December 12, 2009, 06:53:56 PM »

I was acting as me.

*nurses lump*

Phoenix · « **Reply #289 on:** December 12, 2009, 07:29:29 PM »

Acting as who? you may have created the character, but i say when he's used. You woke him up so i'm not surprised he influenced you to smash into a pole.

Saint · « **Reply #290 on:** December 12, 2009, 07:37:29 PM »

Quote from: Saint link=topic=191.msg18898#msg18898 date=1260644036

I was acting as me.

*nurses lump*

Phoenix · « **Reply #291 on:** December 12, 2009, 07:42:14 PM »

This is getting off topic.

So i'll make it relevant.

Who likes the current Chapter 10 title?

NicTei · « **Reply #292 on:** December 12, 2009, 07:54:12 PM »

~raises hand~

Angel · « **Reply #293 on:** December 12, 2009, 08:27:55 PM »

Yeah tis a good one.

Phoenix · « **Reply #294 on:** December 24, 2009, 03:37:50 PM »

To be honest with all you guys, I wasn't going to post any more of 'FS' chapter 10 until it was actually completed, but it's taken longer {once more} then I expected. So, heres chapter 10 as it is on my openoffice file.
See below ^_^

Phoenix · « **Reply #295 on:** December 24, 2009, 03:40:15 PM »

Chapter 10 – Offensive/Defensive?

Kara immediately gave up the struggle to be freed, she knew it was hopeless anyway. Elaine, and her clones were slowly getting closer but although she wanted to escape she wanted to prove that she wasn't even more of a freak show. After all, didn't everyone out of this 'group' know she had that cut on her nose?
Students who were walking past stopped to stare at the scene but knew better then to stick around. It was only when Elaine finally reached them that they realised what was going on and practically diverted going home out of that gate.
“Think you could escape?” Elaine snarled. She smirked at Charlie and Marcos then nodded to Will, Kara thought he'd loosen his grip but he instead tightened it. Almost admitting defeat, Kara hung her head with a quiet sigh and waited. The worst thing was she didn't know what to expect.
“If you're going to hit her, hit me instead.” Marcos snarled, Kara bit her lip quietly and said nothing. There was nothing she could say to change his mind. She knew what was going to happen next, but she just wasn't sure on what order.

“You honestly think I can deny you that small bit of fun from your life? Seeing Kara get hit over and over without you being able to help?” Elaine laughed,
“She's weak, if you do anything to her she'll just collapse! Just leave her alone!” Charlie cried desperately,
“You really think we care what happens to her?” Will laughed,
“Maybe you should!” Marcos growled,
“Why? She's not exactly the bravest person here, and she's definitely not the most important.” Elaine retorted,
“You don't know her,” Charlie whispered,
“What was that 'Princess'?” Will said smugly, tightening his grip on Kara once more straight after. Everyone heard her lightly squeal with pain but no one tried to help her.
“Just leave her alone, leave them both alone. If you're going to hit them, hit me instead. I can take it more then them!” Marcos cried out desperately,
“However much we love your voice Marcos, it's time for you to shut up.” Elaine snapped, “With your current attitude there is no doubt in my mind that we'll be making all three of you pay, the question now is, what order?”
“I asked you a question 'Princess', what did you say?” Will ordered to Charlie,
“I didn't say anything,” She lied,
“Don't lie to me, it really isn't a smart idea.”
“I'm not lying! I swear I'm not, I-” Charlie stopped. She could see the anger in Will's eyes and shivered, Marcos then turned to Will. Having the impact and amount of eyes he wanted watching, he proudly let go of Kara and pushed her so roughly onto the floor her trousers ripped as she landed.

Marcos roared in anger, at the same time Will pushed his way through to Charlie and with the same amount of force managed to repeat his actions. Charlie screamed as she fell, rolling a few times before coming to a halt by a brick wall.
“You really shouldn't have done that,” Marcos warned, “You really really shouldn't have.”
“Too late,” Will smirked. “It seems Kara's already given up the fight,” he continued as he looked to Kara's practically limp body. She hadn't moved from where she'd landed, and it was this that was starting to get Marcos and Charlie worried. “Have you?” He turned to Charlie.
“Leave her alone.” Marcos ordered,
“I haven't even started yet,” Elaine coldly smiled, “It's time you all learnt some respect.”

Off-Topic:

And here is where I left it.

“We haven't even done anything!” Charlie cried, “Why are you getting back at us?”
“Why not? It's fun seeing all of you like this,” Elaine smirked. This, only made Charlie try to fight back even more, at least try to stand up. It didn't take long for her to realise that her leg was cut, and badly at that. Although she didn't notice the stinging before hand,
“Sadist!” Marcos shouted.
“What did you just say?” Will stormed over, Marcos gave Charlie a warning look but Will stood in his way just after. Charlie immediately took the hint, she just had to wait for everyone's eyes to turn to Marcos and Will.
“Why?” Marcos snapped back, “I doubt you even know what it means anyway.”

Kara bit her lip painfully and just waited, tears were fast falling from her eyes but she couldn't let anyone else see, it was a sign of weakness after all. She knew Marcos's plan all too well, she could feel Charlie getting close to her and all the eyes of Elaine's gang slowly watching Marcos and Will. The only problem was she could do nothing to help, except-
-No, they'd notice if Will's arms suddenly became held in mid air like Elaine's arm had. She just had to wait, but for how long?

Charlie looked up once more to see everyone's eyes on Marcos, the reason why was clear when she realised why. In the matter of seconds it took her to glimpse up, Will had punched him clear in the face. The result, Marcos had a nosebleed but he couldn't do anything to stop it because he was still being restrained.
She took her chance and carefully edged the last few steps towards Kara, she felt her jump slightly but just put her arm on Kara's right shoulder. It was their way of saying they were equal, but to anyone else it meant nothing.
“Come on, try to get up, please!” Charlie whispered urgently. She looked up to see Marcos looking straight through Will, looking blankly at him received another punch in the face. This time, he cried out in pain, which was enough to bring Kara to her senses and slowly uncurl.
Charlie helped her, but in those few seconds Elaine turned back to watch Charlie and grabbed Kara by her hair.
“Leave her alone!” Marcos shouted. Charlie saw the end result of this and her trying to pry Elaine's hands off soon after, only Marcos saw what happened though. No one else was watching them, they all seemed to just be stuck to whatever Will was going to do next.

Burningplain · « **Reply #296 on:** January 09, 2010, 06:41:26 PM »

DUDE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love it, this has me hooked. Damn get the next bit up. or executions will follow.
*A large crowd of John's characters can be seen behind him, all of them are armed, all of them look like theya want to here what's next as well.

Phoenix · « **Reply #297 on:** January 09, 2010, 07:57:03 PM »

. I has a new fan for 'FS'.

.

hehehe.
This is my almost newest one I'm proud of ^_^. It also has the most followers, now it has one more! XD

Saint · « **Reply #298 on:** January 09, 2010, 08:06:24 PM »

Quote from: Burningplain link=topic=191.msg20051#msg20051 date=1263062486

DUDE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I love it, this has me hooked. Damn get the next bit up. or executions will follow.
*A large crowd of John's characters can be seen behind him, all of them are armed, all of them look like theya want to here what's next as well.

Hey! No cutting in line! *points to back of line filled with other authors and their character armies waiting to poke Phoenix for the next instalment*

Phoenix · « **Reply #299 on:** January 09, 2010, 08:07:27 PM »

No poking! I have alot on my side you know

and I'm not giving away spoilers.

Burningplain · « **Reply #300 on:** January 10, 2010, 03:44:24 PM »

Quote from: Saint link=topic=191.msg20063#msg20063 date=1263067584

Hey! No cutting in line! *points to back of line filled with other authors and their character armies waiting to poke Phoenix for the next instalment*

Line? I don't see a line.
*Said as a massive blue laser beam incinerates the entire line, apart from John and his group. Then a sweeper comes along and collects up the piles of ashes.*
Now get that next chapter up Pheonix

Tome City · « **Reply #300 on:** January 10, 2010, 03:44:24 PM »

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